“Don’t you dare tell Kermit,” Vanessa replied.
“You think he’ll be angry?” Erica asked.
“It’s my money. I saved up for this.”
“Remember, I’m just a phone call away if you need me.”
The assignment was to add beats to the existing dialogue to create depth. A lot of the students added beats that showed how concerned both women were about Kermit's potential reaction. This is what I came up with:
“I can’t believe you went out and bought one.” Erica stared at the frog-leg cooker on the kitchen table in horror.
“Don’t you dare tell Kermit.” Vanessa removed the fry basket and hefted it, as though calculating how many little green limbs it would hold.
Erica licked her lips and edged toward the door. “You think he’ll be angry?”
Vanessa crossed her arms. “It’s my money. I saved up for this.”